how do i become simple
when tossed aside
like a ship tossed in the channels.
why can’t you
meet me part way
in my complexities,
where the eyes
tell a different story.
maybe i just need
to walk on a little country road
and find my mind,
amidst the dust –
like a pickup that peels out
amidst its tracks.
wouldn’t it be nice
to look for a little high
for a far reaching smile
to keep me hanging on.
but it sure would be nice
if you came along
like a little country song
with a country moonlit serenade
leaving me a little wild
in the neon
where the night danced.
“in the neon
where the night danced.”—Nice!
thanx carrie….promoting some type of hope in my difficult life.
Love the bit about finding your mind in the dust of the country road. Well well written & left an impression in my mind.
thanx RL…..it’s a piece of hope so to speak. in a tough situation that still hasn’t been resolved. I’ve been a mess filled with tears first then now anger. it’s tempered with the bowflex. it’s my only social friend I’ve got. the bright side is my arms have gotten bigger and it’s given me a focus and has tempered tear duct flare ups.
Exercise…always a good choice. 🙂
Sweet and yet sad wanting so much but have always gone to far. Loving this one it is gentle and elegant. Like when nature wind blows through the trees kinda thing.
thank you for the wonderful comment Erica. you’ve hit some thing right on the nail. it will be nice to meet you soon
“How do I become simple” love this line! It sums up the mystery of life and the human experience…We are the only species who complicates everything. “Maybe I just need to walk a little country road”…The solution is so simple and you my dear poet have hit it so eloquently:)
Thanx for wonderful comment. You picked up on some of my thoughts in the piece. I think eloquent does fit it to a tee. Again thanx.
you dance in your poetry
I really like this one. It has a smoothness to the writing, and when read with all of your recent poems, it feels like a transition piece. Less anger and more moving forward. I love the opening line, because it sums up what I feel so often (and I’ll bet many others). “How do I become simple” in such a crazy, fast-paced, chaotic, unstable and often unfair world. Aren’t we all looking for that peaceful country road. I like the repeated use of the adjective “country”, because it seems to represent peace.
i’m glad that you liked this one lora. it does have that smoothness, but once you get into a little further down is where it starts to really get that way. definitely less anger in this one. how do I become so simple is really how the piece evolves, and it’s something that I needed to fall back to. thanx again…:)
Country road – not bad! Country song – absolutely not bad! Keep it up! I enjoyed reading it!
-Naima.
thanx naima…it certainly has a smoothness to it. I bet Pakistan doesn’t have any just like we do here…*LOL*. that’s metaphoric…:)
I hope you come to Pakistan some day and then I’ll let you judge for yourself lol
Yeah, it did have that smoothness… I liked the opening line too but I suppose I never want to be simple!
-Naima.
I want to be simple….then life will situate just fine once that arrives. but some complexities can be a good thing – like for writing and to strengthen mentality !!